FFfAW-Week of 08-11-2015
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“they refused to let me marry him. I’ll show them. I’ll throw myself from the tower.” Ashley thought, while climbing the stairs.
She opened the roof door. A voice grabbed her attention.
“It is him.” She thought.”We are going to die together and they will never separate us again.”
A female laugh froze her.
“You’re the most valuable gift in my life.” He was flirting. She stormed in the roof and start beating him.
“liar.” “Since when is he with you?” Ashley shouted.
“a year.” the fearful lady replied.
“So you were cheating on me.” “Aren’t you angry he cheated on you too?”
The other women nodded.
“So come and beat him with me.”
After a good half an hour, the two ladies were exhausted and the man was unrecognizable.
“Let’s go. He learned his lesson.” Ashely said.
“The police?” The other lady wondered.
“He wouldn’t dare and…there is no witness.”
They smiled and went down.
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You were able to put a lot of information in so few words! Very good! I like the twist that her emotions switched from despair to anger. A fun read! Thank you for participating in FFfAW challenge!
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thank you for taking time to read it. sometimes disappointment leads us to do crazy stuff.
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Yes, that’s very true.
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Hell hath no fury like two women scorned, right? Agree with PJ, the MC going from suicidal to homicidal is a great touch.
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thank you. if she is that emotional to attempt suicide for someone imagine what she can do if she find him cheating on her.
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Yes, exactly. You showed her destructive side well.
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and she made the other women lash out too
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he deserved it. very brave of women to deal with him and not be wooed by him anymore
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He got what he had coming! Well done!
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some people think that they can always get away with their wrong doings, not this time.
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He sure stepped into that one! The women are probably best of friends now…after all, they have something in common. 🙂 Great entertaining story.
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thank you. sometimes the worst situation bring us together in a way nobody understand.
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Hahaha, ohhh, this made laugh out loud, just what i needed :D. They sure taught him a valuable lesson.
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Ouch! They sure got a hold of him, didn’t they? Well done!
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don’t mess with girl 🙂
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More like, don’t mess with the girl’s. I almost feel sorry for the man…almost.
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thank you for reading
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I smiled at the end there as the two women were leaving. Justice is served. 🙂 I think, if there’s a next time, he’ll think before he cheats.
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I think next time he will run the moment he sees a women 🙂
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😀
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thanks for stopping and reading enjoy your day
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Ha ha! This is lovely and you made me laugh. Your use of dialogue is very good!
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thank you 🙂
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As Sonya (above comment) says, ‘Hell hath no fury like a woman scorned’. And in this case, it was two of them! I should feel sorry for the man they left ‘unrecognisable’, but the cheating rat probably deserved a good beating. (Just kidding!).Well done. 😀
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he deserve it a little probably (not that much anyway). 🙂
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For a moment I thought that she was going to throw him from the tower instead of herself, but I think that the way you wrote it is a lot better 🙂
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i did it first but i found this ending is better 🙂
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