this entry is for Mondays Finish the Story
© 2015,Thank you Barbara W. Beacham for the photo.
my entry :
“The cemetery spread along the area known as Devils Abode.” The villagers warned them in that spring day, but they submitted to their son insistence to visit it. The big grave allured the curious boy, especially the mysterious writing in the stone.
“Probably, it’s an ancient language.” Eric explained, examining it.
“Let’s go. It’s starting to thunder.” the wife stated, looking to the gloomy sky, but her husband was absorbed by the shinning letters.
He wanted to stand but his hand was glued to the stone.
“ Did you hear that?” He asked, but his family refuted.
The voice became louder “kill them, kill them.” it said.
As the rain fell, he fainted.
“ERIC” his wife shouted and went down to him but he was already awake.
“You scared me.” she said, checking his red eyes.
“ Sorry to scare you, let go home.” He smirked.
At the end of the road, Eric stopped after a while the tomb illuminated.
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word count ( first sentence excluded) : 148
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I think I’ll pass on visiting this cemetery!!! Do not wish to see a tomb illuminate!!! Good story!!
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yeah me too 🙂
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Don’t think she’s going to enjoy her husband’s company for much longer. Good tale!
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Nicely done! I loved the way you wove this to the final line! Thanks you for another contribution to the Mondays Finish the Story challenge. Be well… ^..^
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Thank you I’m glad you like it. I really enjoyed participating 🙂
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Great story and well told! I agree, she isn’t going to enjoy her husband’s company much longer. Creepy good!
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Scary stuff here. But loved it absolutely. Kudos😀
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thank you 🙂
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A very ominous ending. Somehow I don’t think his family are going to be surviving much longer. I hope you don’t mind me pointing out that when you use a speech tag, such as ‘Eric explained’ or ‘she said’, there should be a comma within the speech marks (“You scared me,” she said…). If you end in a question mark the ‘he’ or ‘she’ after should be lower case (“ Did you hear that?” he asked…). I hope that helps. 🙂
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thank you for pointing that out I thought it was the other way upper case and period thanks for the help and thank you for reading 🙂
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You’re welcome. It’s a mistake a lot of people make. 🙂
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🙂
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